Raptor Rapture (Jane Doe Flash Fiction)

Carrot Ranch October 19 flash fiction challenge: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that includes a raptor.

The sensation of flight is exhilarating. Jane tries to laugh aloud but the wind jerks the sound from her mouth and the air from her very lungs. She lazes, riding a current, the land below a patchwork quilt seamed with roads and rivers. The world shimmers around her. She relaxes into floating free.

Then below – movement.

Tendons stretch, tail lengthens, head lowers, cruel beak leading the way as the downward streak begins. Air thunders by as prey looms closer, unaware yet.

Jane sighs and stirs in her sleep, Troubles twitching next to her as if joining in the hunt.


This flash is a vignette from The Life and Times of Jane Doe. More fun flashes from other writers are at the Carrot Ranch link above.



Author: Deborah Lee

I like trees, dreaming, magic, books, paper, floating, dreaming, rhinos, rocks, stargazing, wine, dragonflies, trains, and silence to hear the world breathe.

9 thoughts on “Raptor Rapture (Jane Doe Flash Fiction)”

  1. Dreams can be very real at times. Usually I can relate mine to something I have seen during the week.
    After this prompt came out I dreamed of a vulture. There were other details… but nothing worth noting.

    There is a song about dreaming that seems to believe we can’t feel our feet in dreams. I’ve tried to test that theory… But when dreams get to that state where you know it is a dream and attempt to control it – I forget to check. 😉

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      1. I think dreams (one to many physiology class) are important, but mostly just process what we have seen that we have not processed consciously. I can often link even the oddest bit so something I remember seeing even up to a week after I’ve ‘witnessed’ it.

        I tried keeping a dream journal – but it just takes up too much time as I tend to remember too many details. XD

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      2. I think you’re mostly right, but I’ve some dream experiences that were interesting enough to make me wonder. I, too, used to invest a lot of time in a dream journal. Now I only write down the intriguing ones.

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  2. There’s a freeing experience in that semi-dreaming state when flight feels eminent. It was the falling dreams I used to dread as I used to suffer from sleep paralysis. But flight was like escape! I love that Troubles joins her. We always say the dogs are “chasing bunnies” when they twitch.

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