Hit the Road? (Jane Doe Flash Fiction)

(This week’s Carrot Ranch writing prompt:  In 99 words (no more, no less) write about something or someone that is transient.

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Why is she still here?

She came here to take a new job,  make a new home, build a new life.  Those haven’t exactly worked out, unless you count camping in an abandoned house as settling down somehow.

But where to go? She’s already learned you can’t go home again.

She could try somewhere else. When everything you own fits on your back, no problem.

And then? Would other sidewalks be kinder, other passersby less judgmental, the ground somehow softer?

“Transient.” The word evokes images of railroad bums sleeping by the river of her childhood.

No. Anything but that.


Author: Deborah Lee

I like trees, dreaming, magic, books, paper, floating, dreaming, rhinos, rocks, stargazing, wine, dragonflies, trains, and silence to hear the world breathe.

8 thoughts on “Hit the Road? (Jane Doe Flash Fiction)”

  1. So much angst in this one. I wonder if the railroad transients were going somewhere, holding to the promise of jobs in California or a hot meal in the next town? And I wonder if they reached Jane Doe’s same conclusion, that it never concludes. The choice, perhaps is acceptance or despair. I’m still on the fence as to which way we will fall. Up, I hope!

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    1. I think we must never lose focus on falling up! I’ve often thought it would be wonderful to live in a cozy, movable home, going wherever the mood dictates, but choice has a LOT to do with liking our circumstances!

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      1. Choice is so important. Todd and I were discussing how we’ve felt like every decision we had to make was rushed and not really a choice. We are slowing things down, living in this little can on wheels. Getting more attached to it now that we are able to fix things

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  2. Great flash. For some people the idea of lack of stability or’transience’ is frightening, in other cases, such as my flash, it sould be what a person craves. On the other hand, we always tend to desire what we don’t have, and it might not really be what we want after all…

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